General

A story with potential but without momentum

It is my last blog spot so I might as well drop one of my scripts that never got made here. Enjoy the story.

Ext. eva’s neighborhood. Day

It is a waning rainfall. EVA(11) walks along an open, dirty gutter, singing, hopping and sometimes picking her steps, one foot before another.

Eva

(sings)

The song here….

A tree billows, cloudy sky, a flash of lightening and Eva runs.

Ext. Eva’s compound. Day

Eva enters the compound, suddenly the rain stops, the sun shines and Eva stops, looking at the sky, amazed, then she continue hopping towards her house, singing….

Two Mosquitoes, SASSY and MACHO, perching on a rusty can holding stagnant water, watch EVA enter the house with a scowl.

ON SASSY—still scowling, we move into her.

INT. INSIDE SASSY MOSQUITO’S BODY. day

The dreaded GENERAL PLASMO, one black eyed, evil creature, faces his subordinates and stamps a map onto the table. The map is marked “internal system of man”.

GENERAL PLASMO

Tonight! We, the plasmodium race shall take over Eva’s body.

agents

Yeah!

General Plasmo and five Agents make a pact, hand on top each others.

Int. EvA’S BEDROOM. NIGHT

Eva circles day 6 on the calender close to her bed, gladly before going to bed and covering up with an ankara wrapper.

ON EVA’s smiling but sleepy face, we move into her.

INT. INSIDE EVA’S BODY. night

Establishment shot of the HEART—we move closer to its entrance. RANDY WHITE BLOOD CELL and GALLANT WHITE BLOOD CELL, side by side, alert when Randy sights CUTE RED BLOOD CELL approaching, bearing handy vitamins.

Randy tugs at Gallant to take a look. Gallant spares CUTE a glance then looks away, casting vigilant stare around. Cute is smiling and looking at Gallant but Randy smiles at Cute.

RANDY WBC

Hello cutie!

CUTE RBC

Hi guys.

(to Gallant)

Mind some juice for refreshment?

GALLANT

Not now, I’ve got a shoot at sight order.

Gallant maintains vigilance and CUTE’s heart sinks.

Int. bain’s office. night

Establishment shot of BAIN(Brain)’s imposing office. BAIN, CEO of EVA’s body, steps forward as HART, a no-nonsense lady maintains a haughty expression.

BAIN

No, I can’t vouch for much competence in your department.

HART

My men are well able to defeat any invader…I repeat, any invader, even the dreaded malaria agents.

Bain shakes his head, he is not convinced.

INT. EVA’S BEDROOM. NIGHT

Sassy and Macho breeze in through the pen hole in the window net, bite into Eva’s skin, sucking blood with relish. When Sassy withdraws its proboscis, blood spot is left on Eva’s skin. Sassy heaves with delight.

ON BLOOD SPOT—we zoom into EVA’s body.

Int. INSIDE EVA’S BODY. DAY

General Plasmo and his agents flows rapidly through an artery and lands with a thud at a point, then each runs in different direction. We follow GENERAL PLASMO till he runs into Cute RBC. CUTE is frightened, G.PLASMO gives her a wicked smile.

CUTE RBC

Gallant will kill you if he finds out you’re here.

GENERAL PLASMO

Really? Well…tell Gallant he would be meeting me soon…

Int. EVA’S BEDROOM. day

Eva is feverish, shaking on the bed. The calender days has been circled to day 24. Eva’s mum comes to feel her temperature, panicking.

EXT. HOSPITAL. DAY

Eva’s mum carries a feverish Eva into the hospital.

Int. INSIDE EVA’S BODY. DAY

Shoot out as General Plasmo is moving towards the BRAIN with five men. 5 WHITE BLOOD CELLS are killed and 2 Agents also killed. GENERAL PLASMO kicks dead WHITE blood cells on the floor as he proceeds into the Brain, followed by 3 AGENTS. Gallant sights him and follows, stealthily.

INT. BAIN’S PALATIAL OFFICE. DAY

Bain swallows hard when General Plasmo enters, evil-laughing and looking about covetously. An Agent mans the door, another follows G.Plasmo, the third harass AVILA.

GENERAL PLASMO

Well, well, well, who do we have here? Checkmate.

General plasmo circles Bain menacingly. Gallant enters, pointing the gun at the agents by the door and using him as bait.

GALLANT

(to General Plasmo)

Game over.

GENERAL PLASMO

Really?

General Plasmo shoots the AGENT then aims at Gallant. Gallant is shocked, he hands up.

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